Some companies sponsor sports as a way to adverties themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The opinion is divided on whether businesses should advertise themselves via sports sponsorship or not.

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some people suggest

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however

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, I believe that financing competitive games

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greater benefits.

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essay will discuss both views in detail followed by a reasoned conclusion

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with, giving financial support to games in other to gain popularity might not achieve the desired effect.

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of the varying

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of the public in different entertainment events, marketing might not achieve its ultimate goal if the majority of the target population

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not keen on the particular event.

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, the advertising of junk foods by a football team will probably not yield popularity since the group of people it focuses on are children who hardly have an interest in soccer.

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, leading to poor broadcasting and waste of resources.

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, marketing and financial aid have mutual benefits in

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regard as both partners gain from each other.

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, when firms put in the budget for sports, more money is available to care for

players

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welfare and purchase suitable training equipment, at the same time the

organisations'

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organisations

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profit at their end by increasing

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awareness.

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, statistics have shown that major clubs run by support groups and the government achieve greater success than the ones that receive monetary assistance from the authorities alone.

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, financing competitive games should be encouraged as both parties gain eventually from each other. In conclusion, controversy still exists on whether enterprises should stop aiding sports because of the poorly targeted group, but I believe that when properly directed, it will improve them a lot.

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task response

Ensure that the introduction clearly states the topic and position on the issue. The conclusion should summarize the main points and reiterate the opinion.

coherence and cohesion

Use transition words and phrases to improve the flow between ideas and paragraphs. Make sure each paragraph connects logically to the next to enhance coherence.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

273 words

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