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In many cities, problems related to overpopulation are becoming more common. Some governments are now encouraging businesses and individuals to move out of cities to rural areas. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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At present, globally, most developed cities are congested due to the spike in population and a significant increase in industries. To overcome these issues, most governments encourage society to move out to rural
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. In my opinion, when considering
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 the weight of advantages are more than the disadvantages.
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 with, the community density of a city will lead to many atrocious circumstances
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 as air pollution due to the increasing traffic and industries, which will arise adverse consequences to the global environment.
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, because of the increasing community contagious diseases can spread rapidly.
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, Singapore is one of the cities with the highest population density, with rapid growth in Corona Virus, even though the government follows strict rules and with extremely cautious sanitization facilities.
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, the government will lose the focus to develop other
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 outside the city since businesses, universities and service sectors are willing to migrate to prominent urban
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, if productions and investors are eager on moving to rural
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, the authorities will have the chance to improve those
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 continuously.
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, one drawback of migrating population to village
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 that country administration need to invest some capital to develop the infrastructure. To illustrate, In Sri Lanka, the government need to construct highways to approach those
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 in a short time from the city because the harbour is located in the capital.
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, they have to grow living conditions
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 as apartments, public transportation and other supplies to facilitate society. In conclusion, by referring to the aforementioned facts all of us can comprehend that there are more pros than cons of migrating the crowd from cities to village
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overpopulation
  • urban congestion
  • quality of life
  • pollution
  • infrastructure
  • public services
  • economic development
  • job opportunities
  • local economies
  • affordable housing
  • standard of living
  • well-being
  • isolation
  • amenities
  • healthcare
  • education facilities
  • entertainment facilities
  • community ties
  • social networks
  • environmental degradation
  • ecosystems
  • biodiversity
  • development
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