Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

#people #zoos #animals

Many argue that

zoos

are unfair for

animals

due to animal

crueality

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cruelty

cruciality

and should have shut down and

on the other hand

, many agree that

zoos

can be protective for wild

animals

. I strongly believe that

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zoos

are

attraction

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an attraction

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point for many children and educate them but it is very cruel for

animals

because they can't live freely under the constant observation of humans.

People

argue that

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zoos

are very much cruel

for

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animals

because they can't survive in constant human interference and observations. Apart from that,

zoos

are built mostly in

a city areas

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city areas

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and are very congested where

animals

can't even roam around properly and get sick instantly by staying locked in a cage or place because they are habitats to live freely in

natural

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atmosphere and due to that reason many

animals

dead. For

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example, Tigers cannot stay

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a single place as they need to roam around and putting them in the cage will make them feel pressured and later they get sick and might have

dead

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. So I

strongly

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against it to put wild

animals

the

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zoos

However

, many

people

believe that putting wild

animals

the

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zoos

are very safe for them

specially

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for endangered

animals

such

as Asia Tigers, Pandas, etc., Where they can be taken

cared

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properly

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of properly

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by humans. Other than

this

zoos

are the attraction point for many

people

and educate children as well.

For instance

, by visiting

zoos

students get to know more about wild

animals

which they have only seen in the

move

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movie

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or books.

Also

, it is an earning point as well from where

government

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gets

huge

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amount of money because it attracts most

people

and children towards it. To sum up,

zoos

are truly unfair for wild

animals

as they can be taken

cared

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care

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moving them in wild reserved areas,

Also

I prefer to see them in videos or movies rather than seeing them locked in the cage.

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captive breeding
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