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Young people who commit crimes should be punished in the same way as adults. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Due to the growing human rights of modern
society
,
punishment
 to young people is less critical than to adults.
On the other hand
, there are advocates who believe that
society
 should punish teen criminals normally. I disagree with the idea that punishments
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 minors should become a higher level. In
this
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reasons
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 the topic.
Firstly
, it is necessary to understand that most young people are immature and have not yet learned what actions are accepted by
society
. Without proper guidance from their parents or elders, they may not be able to know the difference between right and wrong or believe that their actions do not have any negative consequences. At the worst, they can commit acts that violate the law. Considering that the majority of minors may not be trained well according to the standards of
society
 and do not fully understand the effects of their deeds, I argue that the young should receive less severe
punishment
 than adults.
Secondly
, a
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 of
punishment
 may imply longer prison time for juvenile offenders. If a young offender has to be imprisoned for years, he will have to stop going to school. Obviously, not being able to go to school means that he cannot have the opportunity to develop himself. Afterwards, when he has served his sentence, he will be free again and has to be reintegrated into
society
. Since he could not hone his skills during his imprisonment, he may have difficulty earning a living. The worst that could happen is that he would go back to his old ways and commit a crime again due to his lack of resources. To sum up, lowering the degree of
punishment
 for young offenders should be considered because they do not fully understand the weight of their crime. Aside from that, receiving the same
punishment
 as adults can cause a delay
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 their development and hamper their search for jobs.
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