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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today's world, we are living in the materialistic era while the social status and wealth of the
person
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 play a major role in determining value in society. To a certain extent, I somehow agree with the statement that material possessions are the driving factor while making a judgement about a
person
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.
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, I
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 believe that we cannot completely ignore the importance of moral
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, like honesty and a positive attitude.
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 of all, the current generation is more inclined towards a materialistic world. Outer appearance
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 as clothes, jewellery, or luxury cars is valued more while making perception about another
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.
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, many celebrities are famous only because of their expensive outfits even though they hardly show their good performance in acting on TV shows.
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, we cannot completely ignore the relevance of traditional
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. An employer will always look for those who have strong personality traits
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 as honesty, integrity and dedication to their work.
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, a businessman will always prefer to do business with a partner who
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 ethical practice rather than any fake work commitment.
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, a
person
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's worth is judged according to his attitude. To conclude,
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 the majority of judgments are still based upon the social status of the
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, I believe that material possessions play a crucial role in determining an individual's worth. Despite the fact that these
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 may or may not be considered by some individuals who have an old-fashioned way of thinking.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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