universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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colleges
similar
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a similar
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numbers
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males
female
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females
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same
ratio of them have Change the article
the same
positive
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a positive
aspect
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aspects
also
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a negative
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. In Fix the agreement mistake
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this
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points
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the one hand, in developing countries, equality between Change preposition
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gender
have been critical
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a critical
Number
of women who get high education is lower than men because of Change the article
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serveral
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several
reason
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reasons
such
as opportunity and culture. Giving the proportional quota will give female
more chances to enter the Fix the agreement mistake
females
university
and can increase their quality of life. For instance
, schoolgirl
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schoolgirls
to enter
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university
. That's why,
equal numbers of Remove the comma
apply
male
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males
female
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females
accomodate
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accommodate
gender
equality.
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the other hand, Change preposition
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the university
a university
university
must allow fair competition between ladies and Fix the agreement mistake
universities
gentlement
to prove their ability. Correct your spelling
gentlemen
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between them should not be regulated to create fair competition. Women and men may show their ability, so scholar who Add an article
The ratio
join
the Change the verb form
joins
university
is the best ones regardless of their gender
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in Indonesia give proportion for Fix the agreement mistake
universities
male
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males
female
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a female
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female
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females
have
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has
achievement
in high school can not join them. Fix the agreement mistake
achievements
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, that policy could lead to unfair competition because it is consider student
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students
gender
without compare
their ability.
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comparing
equal
number of Change the article
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male
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female
have negative Fix the agreement mistake
females
aspect
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opening
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opportunities
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a female
the female
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females
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