Q: Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. How far do you share this viewpoint?

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There is a point that those who work should donate money
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their salary to charity. It seems that not an appropriate idea for everybody, and I will explain the reasons in the essay.
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, all people might not need to donate a fixed amount of their salary.
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than
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their life problems,
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as paying house
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and electricity
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, etc.
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, the government has to work on
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regulation of charitable donations by giving several options
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based on their capacity. A second negative factor is the lack of financial ability of the population.
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results in people’s focus are not on supporting charity because of the unstable economic system which can increase
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and poor society, especially in developing countries.
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, there is a
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have
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a
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belief
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between
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donation
and charity.
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, some charities could not show
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results and respect.
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destroys their passion to contribute
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activity. It is true that there are some benefits of donation which are supporting children, people, and animals with
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adverse
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, and other difficulties. Despite
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, it appears that those who can donate money already built
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his
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stable
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and
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lives
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like
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people, especially when compared with the public.
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, charitable donations might not
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for everybody to donate an amount of their income
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living issues, financial capacity, and society.
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