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in the future nobody will why printed newspaper aur books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are numerous persons who utilize the internet especially in today's technology-focused world,
this
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 affects the
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 of physical
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 and books.It seems to me that the above intention is not accurate for all facts, and I will explain why in
this
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Firstly
, there are still a large number of human beings who
accustomed
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 to
read
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 the
newspapers
 every morning as their habits.Another argument is that news and facts that were written
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 the papers are more absolute compared to online.Examples can be seen in the political announcements which are described as the major report in
newspapers
,
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 if
this
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 words have mistakes,
this
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 may be even prosecuted.
In addition
, information from printed paper like
newspapers
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 lawful.
This
 range from the declarations of abandonment from parents to the death announcements.
This
 is not to say that the scoops from social media are not always mistaken, there
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 part of correct articles. While it may be corrected that it would appear that generally speaking, human beings easily
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search
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 tidings in
any
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cases
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 they want.It seems appears to be the case,
nevertheless
, that in many cases, the blue light from phone screen affects individuals eyesight,
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which causes
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several eye diseases, whereas the paper
do
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 not have side effects related
with
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 eyes. To conclude, reading from
newspapers
 and books acquire countless advantages like
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rightness, habits, lawfulness and so on, while online do not have
above
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 facts.
Therefore
 I prefer
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physical papers.
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