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every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems.to what extend do you agree.

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Food is vital for every
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 to live.It is argued by many that non-vegetarian food should be prohibited because it leads to several life-threatening health issues.
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, I believe that meat products have their own benefits but there are some reasons to support vegetarian food too.In the following passages, merits and demerits will be elaborated .
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, the primary reason for consuming vegetarian items is that they are completely plant-based.Vegetables ,fruits and pulses are all grown on farms with
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 without killing any live animal.
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,they all contain very high nutritional values in terms of proteins,minerals and vitamins.
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, researchers
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 shown that soybean consists of the highest protein as compared to any other flesh meat.
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,everyone can afford to buy veggies but buying
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animal products is very expensive.
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,there are some advantages to eating meats.Meat dishes have all the necessary vitamins and they are a rich source of iron.
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, studies have proved that a
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 who only eats vegetarian has numerous deficiencies like Vitamin B12.Another reason for consuming non-vegetarian meals is that majority of youngsters who wants to maintain their six-packs needs chicken in their diet.
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, it helps our body more than
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. In conclusion, it depends on
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 to
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 what they like to eat.
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, we should keep in mind that animal species are getting distinct so we should try to save them because we can still live a healthy life without the intake of meats.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chronic diseases
  • balanced diet
  • nutritional deficiencies
  • plant-based diet
  • ethical concerns
  • environmental impact
  • deforestation
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable
  • Vitamin B12
  • processed meat substitutes
  • social and cultural implications
  • mitigate
  • full-time vegetarian
  • plant-based options
  • health benefits
  • commit to vegetarianism
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