The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.
The graphs show the comparable percentage of obtaining enjoyment between single and married
couples
and the happiness of the
couples
with and without
children
or
children
at a certain age. The first graph shows
couples
that are married at a young age are happier than the same type of
the
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apply
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singles at the same age. The happiness level among
couples
is between
forty
and
forty
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forty-five
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five
percent
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per cent
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. The
eighteen
to
twenty nine
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twenty-nine
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, thirty to
forty nine
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forty-nine
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and
sixty
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sixty-five
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five
and over
groups
have experienced the most significant percentage of satisfaction which is approximately
forty
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forty-five
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five
and
forty four
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forty-four
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percent
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per cent
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.
While
the first three
groups
of singles, in comparison with the
couples
, have the lowest percentages which
is
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are
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between
twenty one
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twenty-one
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and
twenty two
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twenty-two
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. The three mentioned
groups
,
sixty
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sixty-five
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five
and over unmarried people have significant differences and their enjoyment level is approximately
thirty four
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thirty-four
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percent
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per cent
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maximum.
Couples
With
children
under
eighteen
years old are
more happy
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happier
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than the other two
groups
that have only
eighteen
years of youth or do not have any
child
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children
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at all. The happiest
couples
are the ones with a kid under
eighteen
years by
forty four
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forty-four
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percent
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per cent
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,
second
to those who don't have a child
are
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at
forty three
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forty-three
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percent
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per cent
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and above
forty one
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forty-one
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is
to
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apply
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the
third
group of
couples
with an
eighteen year old
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eighteen-year-old
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or an only child.
Overall
, information on the chart shows that the quality of life among married people, whether they bring
children
or not,
are
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is
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higher than
unmarried
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among unmarried
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groups
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words couples, children, forty, five, percent, eighteen, groups with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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