The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.
The graphs show the comparable percentage of obtaining enjoyment between single and married
couples
and the happiness of the couples
with and without children
or children
at a certain age.
The first graph shows couples
that are married at a young age are happier than the same type of the
singles at the same age. The happiness level among Correct article usage
apply
couples
is between forty
and forty
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forty-five
five
percent
. The Change the spelling
per cent
eighteen
to twenty nine
, thirty to Add a hyphen
twenty-nine
forty nine
and Add a hyphen
forty-nine
sixty
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sixty-five
five
and over groups
have experienced the most significant percentage of satisfaction which is approximately forty
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forty-five
five
and forty four
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forty-four
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
While
the first three groups
of singles, in comparison with the couples
, have the lowest percentages which is
between Change the verb form
are
twenty one
and Add a hyphen
twenty-one
twenty two
. The three mentioned Add a hyphen
twenty-two
groups
, sixty
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sixty-five
five
and over unmarried people have significant differences and their enjoyment level is approximately thirty four
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thirty-four
percent
maximum.
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per cent
Couples
With children
under eighteen
years old are more happy
than the other two Replace the words
happier
groups
that have only eighteen
years of youth or do not have any child
at all. The happiest Fix the agreement mistake
children
couples
are the ones with a kid under eighteen
years by forty four
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forty-four
percent
, Change the spelling
per cent
second
to those who don't have a child are
at Unnecessary verb
apply
forty three
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forty-three
percent
and above Change the spelling
per cent
forty one
is Add a hyphen
forty-one
to
the Change preposition
apply
third
group of couples
with an eighteen year old
or an only child.
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eighteen-year-old
Overall
, information on the chart shows that the quality of life among married people, whether they bring children
or not, are
higher than Change the verb form
is
unmarried
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among unmarried
groups
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words couples, children, forty, five, percent, eighteen, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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