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With the rapid advancement of communication technology: smart phones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are tremendously controversial perspectives heating a debate over whether the rapid development of communicating devices has more cons than pros. While
this
 thinking is valid to some extent, I would contend that it would bring about more tremendous impact compared to the drawback Without a shadow of a doubt, there is a wealth of disadvantages that have an immense influence on the user, one of them being the emotional distance between
people
. In
this
 day and age,
people
 are overuse smartphones while ignoring communication face to face which leads to the distance between
people
.
For example
, in Vietnam, there is an issue called smartphone addiction which refers to
people
 who always stick to their phones and lock them in their room or house without interacting with other
people
. By spending all their time on phones without doing anything to help their family, they have become burdens to both their family and society. While the drawbacks of communication
technology
 are widely acknowledged, it is unfair if the redeeming features are ignored. Nowadays, with the rapid development of
technology
,
people
 can use a wide range of apps to make friends or communicate with others, namely Facebook or Messenger. With the help of
the
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technology
,
people
 can communicate with each other more efficiently and in less time-consuming ways. In the past, when
people
 use handwriting to write letters to communicate which cost more time to transfer the information, now with top-notch
technology
people
 can transfer the information or communicate instantly. In my opinion, communication devices have enhanced and developed the way that
people
 live. In conclusion, despite some drawbacks caused by
technology
, the benefits of it are still widely acknowledged.
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