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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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Self-driving
vehicles
, directed automatically without human intervention, will receive wide currency in the near future. While improved safety is one of the main
benefits
, it seems to me that its drawbacks, including increased unemployment, being costly/expensive and having trouble implementing outweigh its
benefits
. Chief among the drawbacks might be that many individuals would experience unemployment if driverless
vehicles
 became rife. Not only would drivers lose their jobs but
also
 institutions giving driving licenses and taking driving tests will be closed. Driving and its joy would be the thing of the past.
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 drawback to
this
 is that self-driving cars would be unaffordable for most people. Those cars are likely to impose an unbearable cost on other
systems
, particularly street lights and traffic control
systems
 to facilitate using them. Those
systems
 are required to be upgraded to technologies used in those
vehicles
. Most importantly, using smart control
systems
, they are exposed to being readily hacked or damaged by professional hackers.
Moreover
, they have difficulty operating in certain situations,
for
instance
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 poor road and weather conditions. The main benefit to these cars is bound to be improved safety. They comply with every rule and keep to the speed limit, making roads safer for everyone. Self-driving buses might be more reliable than the traditional ones since all potential deficiencies in the engine will be checked continuously. There would be no human errors,
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 driver fatigue and drunk driving. For
this
 reason, trips will be safer and more comfortable. To sum up, for the above-mentioned reasons particularly increased joblessness which is incredibly significant from an economic perspective I am convinced that the downsides of using robotic
vehicles
 outweigh and outnumber its
benefits
. To sum up, for
above-mentioned
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 reasons particularly increased joblessness which is incredibly significant from
economic
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 I am convinced that the downsides of using robotic
vehicles
 outweigh and outnumber its
benefits
.
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