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Many people are working longer and longer hours. What are the reasons and effects?

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Due to the development of industry, people are recently spending longer and longer
hours
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 on their
work
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. From my perspective, there are various
of
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reasons and
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 statement may bring partly positive and negative effects
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 of all, in order to make more products and increase
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productivity, most of the agencies or companies force their employees to
work
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 longer
hours
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 than in the past.
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, nowadays, some workers have to
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 more than eight
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, even on
weekend
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weekends
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and live under the pressure of deadlines and the enormous amount of
work
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. In some aspects, people want to increase their
finance
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 and achieve more
luxury
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 things in
life
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.
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, they choose to
work
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 hard, glue their eyes to the screen to have a sumptuous
life
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 after retiring
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, things may have two sides, the positive and the other. Working longer and longer
hours
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 can
also
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 satisfy us with what we are desiring,
such
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 as money, materials,and a
life
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 of happiness or prosperity. In
company
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the company
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, it
also
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 gives us an opportunity to promote to a higher situation, with more power, duty, or to enhance ourselves. It is so useless if people do not have
a
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 enjoyable
life
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 when they working for so long. Employees need to learn how to balance their
work
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 and their
life
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, they should spend time
for
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 their families, for their friends and recreation. To sum up, we know that it is hard to keep everything
equilibrium
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in equilibrium
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 in the hustle
life
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.
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, dedication without enjoying
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life
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 is so meaningless because we only live once
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