Some people believe that people have the right to university education, and government should make it free no matter what their financial background. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Some People believe that people have the right to university
education
, and I am
one
of those people who agree
in
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that statement. If only the government could make it accessible to all by giving it for free to those who cannot afford it but wants to receive
quality
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education
. Let us start with the statement that our elders always say, "
Education
is the only treasure we can have in
this
life
that cannot be stolen by others."
This
is
the
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what I always stand up to. Our Philippine national hero said, and
this
is applicable to all countries, that the youth is the future of our nation. But how can
this
happen if our younger
generetions
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generations
generation
cannot even get the
education
they
diserve
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deserve
due to financial constraints? It is not their fault that they were not born with golden
a
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spoon
on
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their mouths. How can they turn their fate around if from the beginning they lack the most important weapon?They say
life
is a constant battle and the world is a battlefield because the main reason for our existence is always survival. The greatest weapon we could ever attain to fight back in
life
is knowledge.
Furthermore
, no
one
can belittle you if they know that you are someone who is equipped with knowledge and skills brought about by graduating in a course or a degree.
In addition
, no
one
could ever put you down if you are
knowlegeable
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knowledgeable
and well educated, your diploma is your key to every lock that was set by the society where only a few were given free passes.
For example
,how can you apply for a high salary paying job and make your
life
financially stable if you don't have the qualifications needed because you don't have a degree
.
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How can the youth survive the rat race if right from the start we already disabled them by taking away their only chance to move forward which is in
this
case,a chance to get a free university
education
.
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In conclusion, all should have the right to free university
education
no matter what their financial background is because
education
is the key to
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their previous financial status to a much better
one
. It's not your fault if you were born in poverty, but it's your fault if you die in poverty.
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