In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast transport for cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays,the topic of transport issues is controversial.some individuals believe that the government should spend a large amount of
money
on enhancing subway
lines
.
In contrast
,others claim that authorities should take
a
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necessary steps to improve the public transport facilities
such
as buses and autos.In my
opinion
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both
amenities are very imperative to travel for the people.
this
essay will discuss
both
statements. To embark on,why the public prefers to travel by
the
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railroad because there are ample benefits of using subway
lines
.
firstly
,by choosing
this
facility.
as a result
,there will be no traffic congestion problem,so we can reach the destination within the time without getting late.
secondly
,the price of the ticket is very cheap compared to the other transports.consequent to
this
,everyone can commute easily without spending too much
money
,
moreover
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people will be available plenty of amenities like
rest rooms
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restrooms
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as well as we can
also
sleep on the bed which is available in the train.
for instance
,two months ago,I went
to
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the
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trip with my family members by
a
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train.
furthermore
,the place was so long where we want to go almost it took time nearly one day.
although
journey
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the journey
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was long,we could easily manage because we were all used to
sleep
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on
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the
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bed.
thus
,subway
lines
are very imperative,so the government try to spend more
money
on constructing new
railway
lines
. On another hand,public transport like buses
is
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is also played
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also
plays a crucial role in everyone's life.
initially
,it is hard to find
railway
lines
for elder people because most of the trains are online booking,but they do not know how to reserve seats,
thus
they prefer to commute by road
lines
.
furthermore
,by choosing commute by bus,it enables
coomfort
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comfort
,but according to my perception,the government should spend
money
on
both
facilities.
for example
,if we want to go
railway
station from our house,
then
we should take
auto
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or bus to reach
railway
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the railway
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station. To conclude,many individuals have different opinions which vary from person to person,so they should only decide which type of
transports
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is easy to commute,
however
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governments are
also
should try to improve
both
facilities.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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