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Some people think that one should plan detailed activities for their leisure time, others disagree with that. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is considered by a few
people
 that planning the fun
time
 in
advance
 has many benefits, while there are others who believe that it is absolutely unnecessary to do preplanning.
This
 essay will discuss both views in the upcoming paragraphs.
However
, in my opinion,
advance
 planning is important and vital to avoid trouble and disturbance. On one hand, individuals think that pre-planning the leisure activities most of the
time
 involves the risk of getting cancelled.
In other words
, if a person plans the fun
time
 in
advance
, it may happen that sudden changes in the health of an individual or unexpected arrival of guests may lead to the cancellation of his valuable planning.
In addition
 to that, it would cause financial as well as mental trouble.
For instance
, my cousin Karan planned his travel to Europe
last
 year but due to the covid pandemic, he needed to cancel all his bookings, that's how he suffered from financial loss and depression.
On the other hand
,
people
 who plan their activities in
advance
 are seen to be happy and stress-free.
This
 is because they can use the provisional offer on hotels or flight bookings which are generally available for pre-booking. On top of that, they save
time
 in deciding and managing the activity.
Furthermore
, they can do budget beforehand that can make the save a handsome amount of money. To exemplify, my aunty planned a get together of her college friends in Goa, a year in
advance
 which made not only her but
also
 her friends convenient and hassle-free. In my opinion, I believe that planning beforehand is crucial are advantageous because it makes
people
 stress-free and saves money.
People
 can plan their leisure
time
 so that they could focus on the tasks needed careful attention.
For example
, my neighbour Mr Singh plays online games in the afternoon so that he could focus on studying at night. In conclusion, planning in
advance
 has its own pros and cons.
However
, I believe that it is more advantageous.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure time
  • detailed activities
  • making the most
  • variety of experiences
  • waste of time
  • over-scheduling
  • spontaneity
  • relaxation
  • increase stress
  • balanced approach
  • impromptu decisions
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