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3. Should countries restrict foreign companies? Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #companies
In
this
 technological era,importing and exporting are rising nationally and internationally.Each
country
 plays a vital role and have tough competition with one another.
Moreover
,in
this
 fast pace, some individuals opine that the state should put restrictions on international companies.I disagree with
this
 notion and the following paragraphs will describe my viewpoint.
To begin
 with,in today's urbanisation era, nations economy is in hands of foreign
countries
. They play a crucial role in one's kingdom.If it will get limited it is going to affect recession.More international companies come into the
country
 it means more benefits.
For example
 , tourism is a part of the economy.60 to 70% of the economy depends on it.If the government stopped
this
Correct determiner usage
these
show examples
 places and businesses got affected badly.
In addition
 to
this
, some of the major product depends on foreign material.
Furthermore
, some
countries
 only grow food and few only have art stuff. Each
country
 depends on one another for artificial and grocery things.
For example
, most organic fruit and vegetable are grown in India only and it exports food to other
countries
.
Moreover
, some
country
's do not have stable temperatures for farming so they do trade with other
countries
.If international products get stopped it is going to affect all these things. To conclude,as above mentioned overseas companies take part as a major role ,their disappearance can cause extensive damage.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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