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Pressure on the school and university students is increasing and students are pushed to work hard when they are young. What are the positive and negative sides of it?

#pressure #school #university #students #work
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 has become much of a stressful environment which puts
students
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 in an always-active condition in order to withstand all the unbearable pressures. In my point of view, I believe
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 tendency brings both positives and negatives. On the positive side, I would argue that
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 tendency brings a wide range of benefits. First of all,
students
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 might study a variety of knowledge
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 all fields in their
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.
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, they might have experiences and opportunities to seek
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a well-paid job with the ideal foundation that they had studied at
university
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, when they work hard in
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 years, they can directly address problems arising in real life and might learn how to control themselves
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 as time management, financial management and many more.
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 helps them become more mature and confident when they graduate. On the negative side, pressure on
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school and
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students
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for working
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hard is the cause of inefficient learning. With a great amount of knowledge acquired on the regular
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,
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 are more likely to be tired and bored. In addition, they have no time to reflect
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 everything that they
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 studied at school.
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,
university
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students
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 are easily stressed if they cannot strike a balance between work and leisure.
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, their enthusiasm for learning will be reduced, resulting in
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poor academic performance. In the
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 cases, they can stop the academic path if they are under a great amount of pressure. In conclusion, despite the fact that pressurizing
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 may help them to be more ambitious, parents and teachers need to do proper counselling and guide them properly.
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 of the student needs to be given consideration.
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