Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays,
people
use to shopping online popularly, who can buy the daily
products
, all the difficult to buy things can be bought online. Indeed, it has brought us many benefits.
Firstly
,
people
like online shopping is because of it’s
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ease
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easy
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and
convenience
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. For students, office workers, who are busyness and they
don’t
have enough
time
to buy the
products
they need.
People
could use the
time
when you
on
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the underground, bus station... And so, online shopping is no limit
time
for online shopping.
People
don’t
need to worry about when the shop closed and lack of
products
. When you prepare to sleep, you can
also
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. Buying items on the internet is a good choice to free up and save
time
their
time
.
Secondly
, shopping online could make
people
compare the
products
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.
Also
, it could save the money
people
spend to go outside. We
don’t
need to go the different
place
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to compare the price and quality. So
people
can pay the lowest prices to buy the higher quality
products
.
For example
, when
people
need to buy some tool or
products
for work, but it
far
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away to his distance, so he
need
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to spend one or two hours to buy. Some businessmen need to buy things from other
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factories, which will cost them a lot of travel fees and money even. But compare it online and decide.
This
will be very convenient.
On the other hand
, online shopping has the problem of
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protection.
People
buying
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on line
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is too easy, it
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to
people
will buy many
products
,even things they
don’t
need.
This
will waste a lot of express
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. These paper
products
from
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trees, So
people
will cut too many trees to produce boxes.
Although
,
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the benefits to
people
shopping online is more, there are
also
a few disadvantages that young
people
should
careful
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it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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