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In Some Areas Of The US Teenagers Are Not Allowed To Be Out Of Doors After a Particular Time At Night. What is ur opinion about this?

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In America, after a specific time at midnight youngsters are not allowed to go out of their homes without the company of an adult. I completely agree with the above statement. In
this
 essay, I would like to shed light on my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs. For the
last
 few ,years restrictions is imposed in the USA at night time owing to, certain reasons.
Firstly
, road crimes,
such
 as kidnapping and items snatching has been escalated immensely ,
therefore
 it is the responsibility of the government to provide protection for the general public.
For example
, in Pakistan rate of street crimes has been increased for, a few years especially at night time.
Hence
, parents do not allow their offspring outside on roads and streets alone even though, if it is so essential they give company to their young ones to go out of the home.
Secondly
, teenagers are not fully mature, and when they get combined in empty streets at late timings they may do any wrong act ,like the use of any harmful drug, or can make use of any dangerous weapon.
For instance
, the majority of young children like to watch TV serials and movies and most of them copy those characters as well who use these drugs and firearms without fear,
as a result
, these children whenever get a chance to have fun with these items they just do it without thinking the bad bad effects of it. After having discussed the pertinent points it can be inferred that there are many bad things which teenagers can develop if they are going out at night. In my opinion, it is
therefore
 the responsibility of both parents and government to take care of the state children because they are the backbone and very precious asset of the country and will help in the development of the country in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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