In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays, misbehaving undergraduates in many institutions
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caused a severe problem
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many nations. I have a firm belief that
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of adolescents not taking studies seriously.
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, the enforcement of strict
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rules and regulations by the
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may curb
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menace. In recent times, nations around the world
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the dissatisfied behaviour of their pupils towards the hall.
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, there's a lack of seriousness in students when it comes to curriculum.
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, youngsters and exuberances are more indulging in parties and clubs, or games rather than getting good
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and passing through their seminary subject.
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, a study by an orthodox professor in Vietnam was conducted
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year, which shows the number of much lower institution
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caused by a lack of consequential
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studying.
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, to resolve
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, enhancing faculty's
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regulations and rules, more severe penalties could result in sentencing.
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, schools should care about their own student's thoughts ,feelings and problems rather than what
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are they getting.
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, the academy's
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rates have gone up over the past ten years
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a lot of pressure that schools are pushing on pupils.
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, schools should not only pay attention to their own
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grades
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but
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thought
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and feelings or empathy
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what they are
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through
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.
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, I think authorities should give their student a healthy environment and good rules with meaningful regulations and penalties that meet their requirement.
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,
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way suicidal, failure and low score graduates may be solved through mental health and physical health.
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