In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays, misbehaving undergraduates in many institutions
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caused a severe problem
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many nations. I have a firm belief that
as a result
of adolescents not taking studies seriously.
However
, the enforcement of strict
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rules and regulations by the
authority
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may curb
this
menace. In recent times, nations around the world
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the dissatisfied behaviour of their pupils towards the hall.
In other words
, there's a lack of seriousness in students when it comes to curriculum.
Moreover
, youngsters and exuberances are more indulging in parties and clubs, or games rather than getting good
grades
and passing through their seminary subject.
For instance
, a study by an orthodox professor in Vietnam was conducted
last
year, which shows the number of much lower institution
grades
caused by a lack of consequential
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studying.
nonetheless
, to resolve
this
, enhancing faculty's
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regulations and rules, more severe penalties could result in sentencing.
Furthermore
, schools should care about their own student's thoughts ,feelings and problems rather than what
grades
are they getting.
For example
, the academy's
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rates have gone up over the past ten years
due to
a lot of pressure that schools are pushing on pupils.
In addition
, schools should not only pay attention to their own
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grades
but
also
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thought
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and feelings or empathy
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what they are
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.
To conclude
, I think authorities should give their student a healthy environment and good rules with meaningful regulations and penalties that meet their requirement.
Hence
,
this
way suicidal, failure and low score graduates may be solved through mental health and physical health.
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