Today family members eat fewer meals together. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative trend?

It has been repeatedly observed that in
this
current phase several family persons around the world consume hardly any meals with each other at the same
time
. There could be multiple
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for
such
occurence
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occurrence
occurrences
;
however
in my perception
this
a
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detriment rather than
benefit
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to a large extent. My preference is elaborated in
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write up. Examining the root causes the foremost one is
hectic
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schedule of the people at work. Nowadays there
are
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more competition in business or even for jobs that person tend to
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more than others for their achievement of aims.
The another
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reason would be
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the distance
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between
workplace
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and home.
For
instance
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both parents are working in
different
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part
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of the country and their children are studying at hometown so that they have no
time
to eat food
togather
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together
at the one movement in a day. Considering the letter question as I mentioned it is a negative impact on
family
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.
To begin
with
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children need attention and guidance from their elders
therefore
dinner is a perfect opportunity to build children
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by listening to them.
Moreover
eating
togather
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together
can enhance builds closer relationship within
family
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. Spending
time
with each other over dinner will definitely keep in touch with each person on a regular basis despite they have different lives. Adding more
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have been alone without companionship which can lead to mental health
disorder
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. To conclude it can be stated that family members eat fewer meals
togather
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together
due to the lack of
time
and
this
will affect to the bonding among members. In my own
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every family in the society should eat one
time
jointly for better health as well as relationship.
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  • communication
  • bonding
  • interaction
  • quality time
  • technology-free
  • busy schedules
  • work commitments
  • nurturing relationships
  • sharing experiences
  • community spirit
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