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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
First of all,
machinery
 has grown in the
last
 few decades and provides a wide range of vehicles
such
 as aeroplanes, cars, trains,
cruise
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and cruise
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 ships to make travel easier and faster for whom time is so important.
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example
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 a tradesman
has
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had
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 to trip over six months by camel and bring cinnamon from India to Europe in
16th
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the 16th
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 and 17th centuries,
however
 nowadays many
individuals
 don’t even have to trip because they do everything online or in case of need they can
flying
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fly
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 by aeroplane which takes only a few hours and more comfortable.
Thus
,
individuals
 have many options to tour easier, faster, and more
comfortable
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comfortably
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 with highly developed
machinery
 .
In addition
 ,
machinery
also
 introduces a wide range of study materials online at low cost or sometimes free.
Moreover
 , everything is just a click away and less time to find a specific book,
also
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which also
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lead
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leads
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numerous
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to numerous
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 other benefits in various fields.
For example
 , Google can find any
topics
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topic
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 we want in a just few seconds.
Hence
 , many people have too many ways to get knowledge. In conclusion,
machinery
 has been significant growth
for
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in
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 the few
last
 decades and has discovered aeroplanes, cars, high-speed trains, and
cruise
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cruises
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 to
individuals
 tour faster, easier, and more
comfortable
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comfortably
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as well as
 developed high-speed internet in which
individuals
 can get knowledge
at
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in
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 various fields.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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