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Mnay manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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"You are what you eat" so goes the old adage. In order to match the pace of the ever-busy and demanding lifestyle, many people opt to consume high
sugar
 level drinks so that they can remain energetic for long periods.
On the other hand
, it is argued that
such
products
 should be made expensive so as to discourage many from buying them. Personally,I agree with
this
 notion that hicking the prices upwards is the solution.
This
 essay will tackle the reasons for my opinion. Two reasons are behind
this
 factor.
Firstly
,
sugar
products
 increase the risk of acquiring diseases easily.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the ministry of health in Zambia in 2010 on the effects of sugars on teeth, proved that a
person
 is 60 per cent likely to have tooth decay if he consumes a high-level
sugar
 product even if it is once in his lifetime.
In other words
, sugars make the body prone and vulnerable to
sugar
 eating bacteria.
Therefore
,
such
products
 should be made expensive to reduce the intake of these
products
 and curb the resulting illnesses. The
second
 reason linked to the
first
 is that high
sugar
 levels in the human body give one a false sense of prolonged energy levels, the
person
 is more likely to become malnourished
as a result
 of skipping meals. To illustrate, a
person
 who takes a high-level
sugar
 product is will remain active for more than 6 hours without having a need to eat or have another drink.
Therefore
,
instead
 of having another meal within 4 hours from the
last
 one, the deceiving energy levels in his body will make a
person
 skip his meal and eventually get malnourished. In conclusion, increasing the prices of high-level
sugar
products
 can help lessen the risk of diseases and malnutrition.
This
 ,in my opinion, is the solution to the problem
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