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Mnay manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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"You are what you eat" so goes the old adage. In order to match the pace of the ever-busy and demanding lifestyle, many people opt to consume high
sugar
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 level drinks so that they can remain energetic for long periods.
On the other hand
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, it is argued that
such
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products
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 should be made expensive so as to discourage many from buying them. Personally,I agree with
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 notion that hicking the prices upwards is the solution.
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 essay will tackle the reasons for my opinion. Two reasons are behind
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 factor.
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,
sugar
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products
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 increase the risk of acquiring diseases easily.
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, a survey conducted by the ministry of health in Zambia in 2010 on the effects of sugars on teeth, proved that a
person
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 is 60 per cent likely to have tooth decay if he consumes a high-level
sugar
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 product even if it is once in his lifetime.
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, sugars make the body prone and vulnerable to
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 eating bacteria.
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,
such
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products
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 should be made expensive to reduce the intake of these
products
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 and curb the resulting illnesses. The
second
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 reason linked to the
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 is that high
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 levels in the human body give one a false sense of prolonged energy levels, the
person
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 is more likely to become malnourished
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 of skipping meals. To illustrate, a
person
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 who takes a high-level
sugar
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 product is will remain active for more than 6 hours without having a need to eat or have another drink.
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,
instead
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 of having another meal within 4 hours from the
last
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 one, the deceiving energy levels in his body will make a
person
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 skip his meal and eventually get malnourished. In conclusion, increasing the prices of high-level
sugar
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products
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 can help lessen the risk of diseases and malnutrition.
This
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 ,in my opinion, is the solution to the problem
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