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In future all cars, busses and trcuks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passangers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,the topic of transport issues is controversial.some
people
 believe that in
upcoming
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 days,technology will be developed in
terms
 of driverless cars,so only
people
 will be inside the
vehicles
 without any help from the motorist.In my opinion,it is the best idea to control all
problems
 which are
facing
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faced
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 by many individuals. To embark on,there are ample benefits of not having
a
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an
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 operator.
firstly
,these days,the number of accidents has been increasing because
the
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 lack of
practices
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practice
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 in driving as well as talking on a phone while driving,
then
 it leads to
reduces
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 in the concentration,
therefore
 if the world enables new technology without
operator's
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operators
operator
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.
as a result
,there will be
reduction
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a reduction
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 in
the
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accidents.
secondly
,the
problems
 of traffic congestion and pollution are
also
decreases
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.
consequently
,not only the public will reach the destination within time but
also
 they will not suffer from skin diseases.
for instance
,the metropolitan areas are crowded due to
the
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overpopulation,
therefore
 many individuals are facing
problems
 while driving in
terms
 of traffic.
additionally
,according to the world health
organisation
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,organisation
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 many
people
 are suffering from skin diseases due to bad fuels which are
using
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used
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 in
vehicles
. On another hand,it is truly said,no rose without thrones.can the drawback of
this
 initiation
can
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be ignored?
initially
,the main
drawbacks
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drawback
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 of not having
a
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an
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 operator
is
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are
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 the cost of
vehicles
 is very high,
therefore
 it is very difficult to purchase
people
 who are below poverty.
furthermore
,
people
 will not aware of using
vehicles
,
thus
 it leads to
lack
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a lack
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 of knowledge about the transport systems.
in addition
 to
this
,many individuals will face
problems
 in
terms
 of job opportunities.
for example
,these days,many
people
 are doing
a
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part time
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part-time
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 work like
cab-drivers
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cab drivers
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 and supplying food through
Zomato
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the Zomato
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 app,so if we use driverless cars
then
 it leads to unemployment. To conclude,the benefits are more than demerits.the pros are in
terms
 of greater safety,traffic congestion and pollution.
In contrast
,the cons are expensive as well as the unemployment.
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