Some people say that traveling abroad is necessary to get knowledge about other countries, while others suggest that TV and the internet can also help people know about foreign countries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,the number of
people
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who are living in India has been decreasing because many individuals prefer to go
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countries like the US and the UK for their higher studies,so many citizens claim that we can enhance our cognitive skills by commuting to another country.
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,others think that it is not necessary to commute because technology enables ample amenities to get news by just sitting at a home.
this
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essay will go into better detail on both the cases with my subject view. To embark on,these days,scholars prefer to study in other
nations
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as facilities of education system
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many job opportunities to students.
moreover
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,they can
also
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do
part time
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job while studying.
consequently
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,they might be stayed independently without asking
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to
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parents
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their parents
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.
furthermore
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,they will be able to communicate with different
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.
as a result
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,increases language skills as well as responsibility towards the family.
for example
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,if we will go to other
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,nobody will come with us,
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we have to
takecare
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take care
of ourselves.ultimately,our responsibility might be increased.
additionally
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,some
people
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usually go
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trips to other
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just for relaxation and to know about cultures. On another hand,
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technologies are available to commute
but
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still
people
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it is
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waste
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wast
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waste
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of
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time because we can
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obtain other
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news through the internet.I think,there are some reasons why
people
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are refused to travel
another
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kingdom.
firstly
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,air transportation is the only way to commute
other
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places,but it is very expensive,
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it is hard to commute for the
destitue
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destitute
people
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.
secondly
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,face to face communication is limited among our family members.
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,if we move to another region,
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we will be no chance to see our parents regularly whenever we want,so at that time we can use phones for communicating
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them. To conclude,many individuals have different opinions which vary from person to person,
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they only decide whether commuting to another region is best or not,but travelling abroad facilitates many opportunities in terms of getting jobs and knowledge.whereas,
although
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the internet provides many facilities to get news,many individuals like to go abroad.
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