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Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
It is often an argued issue that
money
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 should spend on new
buildings
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 rather than
of
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renovating the old
buildings
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. New
buildings
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 can be lived a longer period to
compared
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 the old
museums
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. I partially agree with
this
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 statement and that essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.
Body paragraph 1
To commence with, certainly, capital should be spent on new
museums
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 or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones because these kinds of new
museums
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 can be lived a longer period, new modernized
buildings
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 can be built with a better interior design and all the amenities.
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, these can be given enormous
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 to the population might be used happily.
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India has built new
museums
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 for the population
instead
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 of spending
money
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 on renovating olds.
Therefore
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,
money
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 should be spent on new
buildings
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.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, finance can spend on renovating old
buildings
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 because these actions need a minimum amount of
money
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, resources, labour and everything.
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, demolishing's
building
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buildings
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 can be created numerous economic
loss
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losses
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towards
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for
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 the nations.
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in
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western
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the western
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nation
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nations
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 cannot demolish
to
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their old bildings,
besides
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, they can renovate old
buildings
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.
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, renovating is the best idea rather than building new ones.
Conclusion
To conclude, when all things considered, I am convinced that both have positives and negatives. The government should be spent
money
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 on the proper and useful things. So, I partially agree with the thing indicated statements. I believe that the authority should be taken a better decision which is affordable or huge.

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