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In the modern world there is a movement away from written exams to more practical assessments discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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 world mostly
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 on practical
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 than
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written
 exams.
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First
 of all, the advantages the
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 individuals are
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 and their preference
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 in practicals,
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 nowadays children venture most of the
work
 through hands, recently there was a 10year old boy who inverted a solar bus with no experience of theoretical
work
.
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 think that practical
work
 is much more important, it should be included more to groom these young ones.
Secondly
, the disadvantage is that the generation of today is lazy to sit down and read for many hours , they prefer doing activities to activate their minds.
For instance
, my son gets very sleepy when we sit down to do
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work
 but he gets very energetic with different
work
 done by hands,
therefore
,
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 think practical
work
 should not be ignored, it should be part of the learning curriculum. To sum up,
although
 practical assessments outweigh
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,
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 think
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that written exams should be prioritized because
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 provide a background of your practical understanding
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and
 be able to
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 more.
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