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Students should choose an university major that the prepares them for high-paying careers. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement

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To have a good prospect of a better future,
students
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 need to focus on majoring in courses that prepare them for high-income
jobs
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. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
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 sentiment.
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 can motivate one to work even harder
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 at the university
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 how it can culminate into a guaranteed
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. Two reasons are behind the need for
students
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 to focus on a major that allows them to prepare for well-paying
jobs
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.
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, for a person to make it through university life,
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 are many hurdles that should be overcome and that can only happen if one looks forward to the income he will be earning from his future
job
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.
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, in order to meet all the deadlines and manage to prepare for difficult assignments, the promise of a
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 career can work as a motivation.
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, many
students
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 tend to quit school upon coming across a difficult assignment
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 lack of motivation of which the opposite is true. The second reason linked to the first is that the current
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 market is too hard for many to pull through because of instability in a country's economy.
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,
that is
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 not the case with a
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job
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. To put
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 in perspective,
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 of the
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jobs
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 are hard for one to find as long as he had majored in it
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 at the university. To illustrate,in a survey conducted by an accounting firm on the availability of
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jobs
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 for
students
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 who had a major
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such
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, was determined that the easiest
jobs
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were
high paying
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jobs
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. In conclusion, it is important for
students
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 to choose a major that results in them having a
high paying
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job
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 as it will act as a motivating factor
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 in school and it is the only way to be assured of a stable
job
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 in the future. I strongly agree with
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 notion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university major
  • high paying careers
  • long-term satisfaction
  • fulfillment
  • factors
  • potential
  • income
  • passion
  • interest
  • success
  • job satisfaction
  • transferable skills
  • balance
  • personal interests
  • financial stability
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