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Students should choose an university major that the prepares them for high-paying careers. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement

#students #university #careers
To have a good prospect of a better future,
students
 need to focus on majoring in courses that prepare them for high-income
jobs
. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
this
 sentiment.
This
 essay will highlight how
this
 can motivate one to work even harder
while
 at the university
as well as
 how it can culminate into a guaranteed
job
. Two reasons are behind the need for
students
 to focus on a major that allows them to prepare for well-paying
jobs
.
Firstly
, for a person to make it through university life,
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 are many hurdles that should be overcome and that can only happen if one looks forward to the income he will be earning from his future
job
.
In other words
, in order to meet all the deadlines and manage to prepare for difficult assignments, the promise of a
high paying
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 career can work as a motivation.
For example
, many
students
 tend to quit school upon coming across a difficult assignment
due to
 lack of motivation of which the opposite is true. The second reason linked to the first is that the current
job
 market is too hard for many to pull through because of instability in a country's economy.
On the contrary
,
that is
 not the case with a
high paying
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job
. To put
this
 in perspective,
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 of the
high paying
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jobs
 are hard for one to find as long as he had majored in it
while
 at the university. To illustrate,in a survey conducted by an accounting firm on the availability of
high paying
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jobs
 for
students
 who had a major
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such
, was determined that the easiest
jobs
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were
high paying
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jobs
. In conclusion, it is important for
students
 to choose a major that results in them having a
high paying
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job
 as it will act as a motivating factor
while
 in school and it is the only way to be assured of a stable
job
 in the future. I strongly agree with
this
 notion.
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task response
Ensure a clear and direct response to the essay prompt. Develop and support your arguments effectively.
coherence cohesion
Improve the flow of ideas between paragraphs to enhance the overall coherence of the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • university major
  • high paying careers
  • long-term satisfaction
  • fulfillment
  • factors
  • potential
  • income
  • passion
  • interest
  • success
  • job satisfaction
  • transferable skills
  • balance
  • personal interests
  • financial stability
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