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disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.

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In today's world ,the combination of students with different
level
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 of school rule obedience has become a matter of concern to many parents and experts. A considerable controversy at present is whether the impolite pupils should be filtered and isolated or not.
This
 essay deals with
this
 controversial theory. Those in favour of
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 of obedient and disobedient pupils believe that antisocial behaviour patterns are a communicable infection and increase the total rate of delinquency and crime in society.
Furthermore
, they suggest that
this
 could endanger community moral standards and jeopardize protecting the human rights of pupils as young citizens. Striking examples are child abuse and bullying by cruel classmates. Those who are against isolation have reasons that cannot be ignored. The most crucial argument is that by isolating students with antisocial behaviours, they might suffer from
this
 stigma in their future life and even be encouraged to more delinquency and destructive manners.
In addition
, they claim that the teachers are responsible for providing
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 and promoting equality, justice, and fairness. They should
also
 protect naughty and bad-tempered students from discrimination. They believe the most effective way of education is to have interpersonal communication with valid and polite classmates as live inspiration and example.
This
 might lead to maintaining peace and discipline in the school atmosphere and protecting the school's safety as a small community.
Last
 but not least, using pedagogical experts to establish a justifiable balance is an integral part of any educational approach. For the aforementioned reasons, the most reasonable solution is trying to synthesize various character types in classes and confirm laws to establish stability in that environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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