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Smoking in public places should banned. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many countries today have voted laws that interdict smoking in public places. We agree with
this
 because many peoples show interest to
smoke
 outside even though it causes
huge
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 effect on public health and
environment
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 as well. In the following , we will support our assertion.
Firstly
, smoking in public places will lead to many health issues
on
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smokers
 and nonsmokers. When people's
smoke
, the dangerous fumes from the cigarettes will go to the respiratory tract and causes cancer.
For instance
, if a person
smoke
 in
public
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 park, the
persons
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 who surround
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the
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smokers
 absorb those fumes so
restriction
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 on smoking will reduce health issues of
public
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.
Secondly
, public smoking can affect
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young people to addict
on
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 it. Children and youth perceive smoking
is
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 one of the factors to enjoy
thus
 they may practice and addict
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. In effect, it is argued that
young
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 generation
are
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 prone to smoking addiction when they see
smokers
 all the time.
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,
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 cigarettes in outdoor causes damage
on
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environment
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 because
this
 can increase air pollution. Of course, smoking creat very
discomfort
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 in nonsmokers If
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anyone
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any one
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anyone
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smoke
 in public.
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The smell
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 which generates from cigarettes while
smoke
, sometimes it generates
nause
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nausea
cause
, headache,
irrtation
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irritation
 and discomfort to the who stand
next
of
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 the
smokers
.
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