The probability of an offender committing a crime after serving the first punishment has increased. What is the reason for this and how can this problem be tackled?

In recent times, the recurrence of
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criminal activity being conducted again, despite serving a sentence for an act of
crime
by
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criminal prior has increased. In
this
essay, I will explore the reasons for
this
rising problem and suggest possible solutions.
Firstly
, I will discuss the economic factors leading to
such
crime
and
secondly
, will provide an insight into the acceptability of the
society
for
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convicted
person
.
To begin
with,
many a times
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after a criminal is released from prison there is
lack
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of rehabilitation facilities & employment opportunities. Even though
,
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the
person
might want to earn his livelihood honestly but due to his criminal
record
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there is a dearth of employment opportunities and is unable to earn a decent living.
Consequently
, Due to lack of
funds
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the
person
resorts to his previous unlawful activities for sustenance . One solution
,
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can be the government having a counselling program for convicts who are to be released and having an employment program for them in place.
As a result
, they will be able to take care of themselves financially without engaging in criminal activities. Another reason for a released convict to engage in
crime
is that the acceptance of the
society
to prior criminals is very low. Most of the
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, The
person
carries the stigma of his previous
crime
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throughout
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through out
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his life and
the
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society
is not benevolent enough in forgiving him. cause of
this
, the
person
is unable to start
a fresh
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and starts holding grudges against
the
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society
pushing him to a life of
crime
again. One solution
,
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can be, that a counsellor is hired by the government who keeps a weekly tab on the mental state of the
person
and communicates with him on how he is being treated by
the
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society
.
As a result
, the
person
will be able to vent his frustration and be ensured that there is
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someone
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some one
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handholding him through
this
phase. To conclude,
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are certain reasons why an act of
crime
is committed despite a sentence being served. The government must ensure there are programs in place to ensure that the released
person
can become an integral part of the
society
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not
tainted
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by his past.
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