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Whether or not someone achieves their aim is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree and disagree.

#someone #aim #luck
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Being lucky is a pivotal attribute in
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 modern world but people should not completely depend on
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 factor. Nowadays, many think that luck is a major trait to get succeed in
one
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's goal. I completely deny
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 statement because hard
work
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 plays a crucial role to become a successful person in their life. In
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 essay, I will briefly discuss my viewpoints in detail.
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 with, achieving
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 is not merely come from a single aspect, it has a myriad of characteristics to
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 with. In that, hard
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 plays a key role.
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, spending a plethora of hours in a particular
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 will boost the skill in that field.
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, Neeraj Chopra won the gold medal in javelin throw in the Olympics,
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 he had been
practiced
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 for many years,
still
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 people call him
as
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a lucky person.
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, luck is not enough to achieve
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, working hard and the amount of time spent is matters.
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,
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 can learn enormous things from failures. Indeed, doing mistakes is common for everyone but learning from that errors and correcting those is imperative.
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,
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 ought not to do the same mistakes in the
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 attempt as they did previously. To exemplify
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, the world richest billionaire Elon Musk had failed twice in the return launch space vehicle project and he had succeeded in his
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 attempt.
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, he learned and applied
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his mistakes to the
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 trial would have been helped him to get
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.
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, failure is another way to learn and become successful in
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's career. To sum up,
lucky
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 or unlucky is not a matter despite,
hardwork
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hard work
 and facing failures is always play a vital aspect to achieve
success
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 in our life.
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