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Whether or not someone achieves their aim is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree and disagree.

#someone #aim #luck
Being lucky is a pivotal attribute in
this
 modern world but people should not completely depend on
this
 factor. Nowadays, many think that luck is a major trait to get succeed in
one
's goal. I completely deny
this
 statement because hard
work
 plays a crucial role to become a successful person in their life. In
this
 essay, I will briefly discuss my viewpoints in detail.
To begin
 with, achieving
success
 is not merely come from a single aspect, it has a myriad of characteristics to
work
 with. In that, hard
work
 plays a key role.
In addition
, spending a plethora of hours in a particular
work
 will boost the skill in that field.
For instance
, Neeraj Chopra won the gold medal in javelin throw in the Olympics,
although
 he had been
practiced
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 for many years,
still
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 people call him
as
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a lucky person.
Thus
, luck is not enough to achieve
success
, working hard and the amount of time spent is matters.
On the other hand
,
one
 can learn enormous things from failures. Indeed, doing mistakes is common for everyone but learning from that errors and correcting those is imperative.
Moreover
,
One
 ought not to do the same mistakes in the
next
 attempt as they did previously. To exemplify
this
, the world richest billionaire Elon Musk had failed twice in the return launch space vehicle project and he had succeeded in his
third
 attempt.
However
, he learned and applied
from
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his mistakes to the
next
 trial would have been helped him to get
success
.
Therefore
, failure is another way to learn and become successful in
one
's career. To sum up,
lucky
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 or unlucky is not a matter despite,
hardwork
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hard work
 and facing failures is always play a vital aspect to achieve
success
 in our life.
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