Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.To what extend do you agree or disagree?
These days,everyone desires to become a famous
person
whether it is in an optimistic or pessimistic way because they are influenced by renowned personalities,but nowadays,many individuals become famous without having any knowledge.however
,beautyness
and financial background are Correct your spelling
beauties
also
used to become superstar
.Add an article
a superstar
as a result
,it will be badly affected on youngster's life,so I accord this
statement.
To embark on,a person
can also
become well known without having any skills.firstly
,a person
who is well versed with the
technology can become famous overnight,Correct article usage
apply
therefore
many individuals follow their favourite celebrities and do what they do either
it is good or bad.they just follow them blindly.Correct word choice
whether
secondly
,people
who have power and money also
become well known because these things motivate them to become famous.consequently
,teenagers are also
interested to earn more money as they tend to become renowned persons
.Replace the word
people
moreover
,many celebrities are exposed with
their dressing style by Change preposition
to
wearying
modern clothes Correct your spelling
wearing
instead
of traditional clothes.therefore
,many individuals influenced
by their clothing preference.Add a missing verb
are influenced
for instance
,according to the film industry,directors prefer to select people
by seeing their dressing style,so Correct your spelling
maybe
may be
Correct your spelling
maybe
this
the
reason why Add a missing verb
is the
people
are habituated to modern dresses.
On another hand,celebrities are role models for their fans ,thus
they are also
tried to impress their fans in many ways.the media is also
one reason to become famous as today even the comman
man with some talent,becomes well known due to the advancement in technology.Correct your spelling
common
for example
,In the past,there was
no media,Change the verb form
were
however
those Add the comma(s)
,however
people
were famous who had really achieved great heights,but today it is completely changed due to the technology.
To conclude,although
being famous
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a famous
person
enables many offers,it is
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also provides
also
provides bad
message to Add an article
a bad
the bad
the
young Correct article usage
apply
people
.to become famous first
we have to require great knowledge rather than power and money.Submitted by anushachenna15 on
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