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People say that it is a waste of time for high school students to learn literature at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #waste #time #school #students #literature
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There are
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 who believe that
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litrature
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literature
 is not practical for high
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students
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 may not be desirable for some
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 and
people
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,
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 should be familiar with his own language and its
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. Some
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 consider
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 out of no use in their
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 life out of
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.They believe
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 boring which is not only a hard
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time consuming
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 in a way that
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 them from, what in their opinion, more important subjects like math or physics.
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, they usually get bad marks or even fail
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 which makes them study
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 once again during summer and ruin their spare time during
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 season.
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, they believe they are fluent enough in their own language and
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don't
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litrature
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 after
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 so there is no reason to learn it which is not smart.
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 is part of
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 culture and roots. Far from what
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 they belong to one community with a unique language in which most
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 are fanatic about them.
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, when a national team of soccer win in
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 cup almost all
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 become deeply pleased and glad without wondering if it is a waste of time watching soccer on T.V or
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 a lot of money just to travel to the country hosting world cup only to be among the audience of their national team.
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Litrature
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 influence our life
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 the same way, we should be proud of our poems and
litarture
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 as without them we would not be defined as who we are now. In conclusion,
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 the fact that some
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 and
students
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 are bored with
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,
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 must be instructed at
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 as it is a
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 to life and souls.
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