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Some people say that the only way to learn a second language well is to live in a country where that language is spoken. What is your opinion about this?

#people #second #language #country
Some
people
 think to learn
language
 because it is good when we stay in
other country
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another country
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 with different
language
. I think
,
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this
 is
good
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a good
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 option because
people
 can get jobs very easy and it is
also
 good because you can understand the
people
 if you know
language
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the language
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.
Language
 is not like maths, if
child
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learn
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 math in India or in Canada, it is
same
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. But
language
 is
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the difference
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difference
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 and sometimes difficult so we have to learn the
language
 from starting point.
For example
, it is difficult for Punjabi
people
 to speak very good English but can manage basic and it is a problem when Punjabi come to Canada. So it is good for
people
 to learn English so they can talk properly in Canada. It is good to know more than one
language
. Sometimes, some
job
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asking
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 for
people
 who can speak 2 or more
language
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.
For example
, if salespeople in call
center
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 know more
language
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 they can easy to speak to many
people
 who know
other
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another language
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language
. So
this
 is
useful
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a useful
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 skill in
job
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the job
a job
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.
This
 is
also
good
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a good
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 reason to learn
many
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any
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language
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. In total, it is good for
people
 to know the
language
 in the country where staying. My opinion is that it is very useful if
people
 know
second
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language
not
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 just the mother
language
 because it can do only good and no harm. So
people
 must learn
second
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a second
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language
specially
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especially
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 if
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they immigration
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immigration
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immigrate
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 to another country.
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