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Some people say that the only way to learn a second language well is to live in a country where that language is spoken. What is your opinion about this?

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 with different
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 option because
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 good because you can understand the
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 is not like maths, if
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learn
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 math in India or in Canada, it is
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. But
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 and sometimes difficult so we have to learn the
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, it is difficult for Punjabi
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 to speak very good English but can manage basic and it is a problem when Punjabi come to Canada. So it is good for
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 to learn English so they can talk properly in Canada. It is good to know more than one
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. Sometimes, some
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asking
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 for
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 who can speak 2 or more
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, if salespeople in call
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 know more
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 they can easy to speak to many
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 who know
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. In total, it is good for
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 in the country where staying. My opinion is that it is very useful if
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 because it can do only good and no harm. So
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immigration
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 to another country.
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