In some cultures, childrens are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

In a few societies says by their
parents
to
children
,if they endeavour in their life they will succeed in any phase. There are pros and cons of
this
statement and I am going to discuss them in
this
essay.
To begin
, nowadays young adults
don'tt
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don't
doesn't
have patience, they need instant results in any work,
However
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their
parents
teach them about mental fitness like doing yoga or meditation can calm their minds in any difficult situation. For ,example Indian
parents
suggest their
children
tutor to, in school
time
they will teach pupils about meditation
also
provide books of yoga gurus, motivational speakers or life coaches. So they can knowledge regarding mental health.
Thus
parents
should
also
teach their
children
about mental health.
On the other hand
, few
parents
continuously force
children
to get good marks in exams and because of
this
reason
children
do hard work in exam
time
and give their hundred per cent ,
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some
children
don't score well in the exam. Because of ,that they will in depression, anxiety
also
some
time
they get heart attacks at
this
age. For ,instance in Kerela one student tries to suicide for not being selected in IIT college. Ask
this
student about
this
incident they told them that his
parents
are told him since his childhood that you have to become an engineer from IIT college. He studied intensive but he didn't achieve
although
he is a very smart child he hasn't achieved their parent's dream that's why he did
this
suicide attempt. In conclusion, there are plus points in advising
children
to try hard enough to succeed in any task, but at the same
time
know their abilities and teach them smartly.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inspiration
  • motivation
  • work ethic
  • resilience
  • self-confidence
  • self-worth
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • frustration
  • self-esteem
  • pressure
  • anxiety
  • individual effort
  • collaboration
  • social support
  • systemic factors
  • talent
  • opportunity
  • luck
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