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Every country should have a free-health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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For a number of countries in the world,free-
health
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 service is a dream issue as for them basic medical needs are out of reach. So
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 steps like providing those
services
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 to every country, even without the latest medical
treatment
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 as they are costly will be welcomed by everyone and I agree with the above idea and going to elaborate
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Health
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services
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 are costlier in every corner of the world and for those who are below the poverty line to get medical
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 is becoming the biggest problem is they are meeting their ends for basic requirements with huge struggles and lack of savings.If free-medical service is available that will be a boon for
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 people and greatly appreciate the governments step in enabling them
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 will help maintain the good
health
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 of citizens and greatly improve the workforce of the country,eventually adding to the economy of the country. Free-
health
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 service will take a bigger part of the budget but it will be cost-effective as there will be a smaller number of missing work hours as people will get
treatment
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 in a timely manner which will result in a speedy recovery and return to work.Expensive treatments should be covered under private
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 insurance or given by employers as benefit coverage to the employee and their families as well as those not covered under any scheme should be offered subsidies in insurance premium so,that everyone can have all the necessary
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 when they look for it. In conclusion, I fully agree with the statement of enabling free-
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services
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 to all the countries of the globe excluding the newest high priced treatments but giving all the basic
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services
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 to every citizen over the earth and that will be the greatest achievement of civilized society.
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