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Topic: It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents . Do you agree or disagree .

#topic #college #students #home #parents
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It is often an argued issue whether higher
studies
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 pupils stay alone or stay at home with their family in many talk shows. I think universities student to live alone by themselves rather than staying with their
parents
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, I strongly agree with
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 statement and that essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. To commence with, higher
studies
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 pupils can be lived to stay away from their family and home which means they can stay with their friends and college's
accomodation
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accommodation
 while they should be known about the value of
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 and
real
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 world. They can spend on all expenses by their working
money
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, so these
students
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 might be reduced the expenses rate to compared spending on
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their
parents
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 capital.
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, in Australia, higher
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 pupils like to leave to their home and
parents
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 meanwhile they go to
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 work and earns some
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 for their personal as well as educational.
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 these
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 should be stayed alone
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 of being with their mothers and fathers.
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, staying alone without family can give numerous chances to
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 trouble by themselves,
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, they can be managed all problems in their future even difficult situations too. If a college student stays alone in his higher education
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 period, he will be faced all situations by themselves without holding their
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 like decision and economy.
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, a recent report by the Times of India said that more than 60% of the western countries,
students
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 live alone when higher
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.
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 they could be lived alone. To conclude, college
students
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 can be lived alone while they can learn
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plenty of things
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 as
value
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 of
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 and life.
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, I strongly agree with that statement in the above-mentioned details and I believe that
students
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 should be followed the aforementioned way.
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