Both governments and individuals are spending vast amounts of money protecting animals and their habitat. This money could be better spent dealing with fundamental issues in society such as poverty and health care. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, more
money
was
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is
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appropriated for caring
animals
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for animals
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and their wildlife habitat .
However
, in many
counties
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countries
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, some
people
have essential issues
of
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in
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life
. Because they
have
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do have
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not
a
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apply
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suitable financial
circumstance
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circumstances
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. Many of them require
the
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a
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home and earn more
money
. In
this
essay, I will describe
about
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my opinion
in
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on
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which
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how
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the government should be more considerate quality of
people
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lives. In many
of
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developed and developing countries, dogs and pets are protected by
people
and
government
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the government
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. It is so important for them
which
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that
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they allocate an amount
as
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animal protection in the country’s budget every year. Because
,
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some species of
animals
are endangered or they are threatened by poachers and hunters.
Therefore
, the
governments
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government
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is committed to keeping and caring for all
animals
and their habitat.
Furthermore
, the conservation of
animals
and
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worldwide
need
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too much
money
which
it
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apply
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should be covered and paid
by
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for by
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the government and
people
in these countries .
This
budget
sometime
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is equal
or
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more than the cost of education in some other countries.
Although
we must respect and protect
the
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apply
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wild
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wildlife
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life
and the environment, some men and women in the
world
do not have any suitable
life
and minimum
convenient
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. Unfortunately, some children in the
world
have been deprived of normal education and home
life
. In conclusion, these days many
people
spend a lot of
money
for
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on
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their pets and some
animals
.
Also
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they
are organized
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some environmental groups
for protecting
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to protect
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them.
On the other
hand
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there are many
human
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humans
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in our
world
whom
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who
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need
foods
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food
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,
home
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a home
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and other facilities .I
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believe
beilive
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believe
that it is not worth spending
money
for
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on
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animals
when other
human
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humans
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in the
world
face
to
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too
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many
seriously
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problems
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