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Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other part of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. What are the problems of this? Suggest some solutions to solve the problem?

#people #balance #work #part #lives
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Having a
balance
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 between
work
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 and
life
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 has been a dream and goal for a lot of
people
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.
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, it is not easy to achieve said
balance
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.
This
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 essay will discuss the main problems of achieving
this
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balance
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, which
are
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 lack of
time
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management
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 and
stress
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,
then
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 it will provide the solutions to the problem. The two biggest problems to achieving a
work
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-
life
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balance
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 are a lack of
time
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management
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 and experiencing
stress
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. Having poor
time
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management
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 skills would lead to disruption in a person's working
hour
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, social activities, and resting
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. Without managing
time
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 properly,
people
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 may lose a big part of their day to only one aspect of their needs, whether it's limited to finishing a job task but not getting enough rest, or relaxing too much and slacking off. Another huge problem
people
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 might encounter while trying to achieve a
work
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-
life
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balance
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,
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 is stressing too much.
People
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 might worry too hard
in
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about
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 trying to achieve
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balance
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, ending up messing
their
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with their
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work
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 and
life
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 activities even more. The solution to the
first
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 problem is sharpening your
time
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management
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 skills by using helpful tools,
such
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 as calendars, to-do lists, and schedules. Tools that help us divide our
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 and plan ahead will help us
take
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 conscious decisions, avoiding
us
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from
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issues
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 as working or relaxing too often. Meanwhile, reflecting on
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ourselves
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 and our
goal
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 through journals and meditation might help reduce
stress
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.
Instead
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 of focusing too much on how to achieve a perfect
work
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 and
life
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balance
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 as soon as possible, think of it as a long journey that requires patience. It is important to remember that it's okay to make mistakes in managing your
time
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,
work
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, or other activities. In conclusion, the main problems that
people
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 usually face while trying to achieve a
work
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 and
life
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balance
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 are
lack
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a lack
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 of
time
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management
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 and
stress
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. These can be easily solved by dividing our
time
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, planning ahead, and reflecting on our goal daily.
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