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Successful companies use advertising to make more sales. What can make an advertisement very effective? Do you think this is a bad or a good thing for the society?

#companies #sales #advertisement #society
In the present time , advertising
have
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 become more successful
of
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 both new and old production .
In addition
 with the progress that we
have
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 it is very essential . I will discuss impact adv on some
sales
 and give my believe if it would be good or bad . In
this
 time , it
have
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has
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 become successful
companies
 by
use
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using
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 advertising to make more
sales
 .
Firstly
 , it more effectively of through
this
 way on the
people
who
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 it
make
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 more buy
any thing
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anything
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 you watching in TV or social media .
The some
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companies
 it
is acquire
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 more money from social media .
For example
 , snap chat
also
 some famous
person
 it made some advertising .
Secondly
 , there are
companies
 it has not popularity . More of the institute in the present day it gets aware more than before years .
However
,
people
 it has become more watching . There are many
products
 that increase by rate watching because of adv.
Moreover
 , it has many merits for
this
 way . Any
person
 if does not like to go mall just see the
sales
 and order that .
In addition
 , knowing if it was the
products
 it is very pretty or bad . There is pay especially for the
products
 and the
people
 you can write your commands and evaluation the production . And the cons of adv might can the praise of
sales
 it is very expensive and there
are
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 no discount for that . Might some of
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apply
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the
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them
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 it
is lie
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. Some
companies
it
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apply
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gives
person
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a person
the person
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 to make it and should the
person
 it remember the product because the
people
 it
buy
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buys
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 that but other company it
is lie
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lies
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 just want to acquire
sales
 . In
conclude
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, there are merits and demerits
for
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to
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the
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apply
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advertising . I believe it is very good and it has many effective for
people
 but I wish some company it is attention about credibility the
products
 .
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