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Children’s leisure activities should be educational because they have too much to learn before they become adults. Do you agree or disagree?

#children’s #leisure #activities #adults
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 few years parenting models have changed a lot. Some parents, from bad experiences in the past, have an emphasis on
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 their children skills that they have not achieved in their childhood.
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, their parenthood is based on academic
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,
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, these parents believe that children’s leisure time should be full of educational activities. In front of
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 reasons. To start with, it is considered that childhood is one of the shortest periods
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 human growth.
This
 period is important because is when
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children
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brain
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start
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 to develop and recognise things
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 are good or bad for them. For
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 reason, it is important that kids feel free to experience
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differents
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 of situations, feel curiosity and ask about everything. So, thanks to their
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knowledge
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acquired
 by their own
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experiences
experience
 children will obtain the ability to know what they like the most.
In addition
, as it was mentioned before, nowadays exist too much emphasis
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 academic learning. Parents want to
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 dreams
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 their
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children
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,
hence
 they complete children’s free time by other extracurricular activities
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 as learning different languages, playing an instrument or doing sports. What is more, they do not see that all
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 activities are not chosen by their kids and consequences that it could bring with as
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self-esteem
 and creativity problems. In conclusion,
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 my point of view, it is of vital importance to get enough free time to children to help them to discover themselves and create their own experience. Because
that is
 a unique way to help them to learn their skills and abilities and what they like the most.
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