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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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There are tons of
food
 being thrown away by our local supermarkets, markets and restaurants. The
food
 that we let go are in huge
amount
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 and could feed the hungry population twice and end world hunger. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reasons why we waste
food
 and the solution to
this
 problem.
Firstly
, customers who dine out could leave
food
 uneaten because of bad taste.
Secondly
, vegetables harvested are not all pretty, the less
asthestic
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aesthetic
authentic
 looking
one
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ones
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 usually get discarded because supermarkets wouldn’t want to buy them. There is a misconception in the consumer’s mind that it is better to buy good looking fruits and vegetables even though the deformed
one
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ones
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also
taste
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 the same and are ok to eat as well.
Thirdly
, some people just spend too much money buying and storing
food
 they might not need and these foods end up
expired
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. In order to end
this
 wasting frenzy, we could start with
food
 distributors
first
.
For example
, we can gather ugly fruits and veggies that the farmer couldn’t sell and sell
them
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apply
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much cheaper to the poor
instead
 of throwing
away
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them away
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. We can educate people on the misconception of less good looking
food
 and let them know that it is ok to eat them.
Furthermore
, we have to bring awareness about world hunger and come up with a solution to donate
food
instead
 of wasting it.
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