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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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There are tons of
food
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 being thrown away by our local supermarkets, markets and restaurants. The
food
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 that we let go are in huge amounts and could feed the hungry population twice and end world hunger. In
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 essay, I will discuss the reasons why we waste
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 and the solution to
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 problem.
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, customers who dine out could leave
food
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 uneaten because of bad taste.
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, vegetables harvested are not all pretty, the less
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aesthetic
 looking ones usually get discarded because supermarkets wouldn’t want to buy them. There is a misconception in the consumer’s mind that it is better to buy good looking fruits and vegetables even though the deformed ones taste the same and are ok to eat as well.
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, some people just spend too much money buying and storing
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 they might not need and these foods end up expiring. In order to end
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 wasting frenzy, we could start with
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 distributors
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.
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, we can gather ugly fruits and veggies that the farmer couldn’t sell and sell these for much cheaper to the poor
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 of throwing them away. We can educate people on the misconception of less good looking
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 and let them know that it is ok to eat them.
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, we have to bring awareness about world hunger and come up with a solution to donate
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instead
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 of wasting it.
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