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The government should make laws about people’s nutrition and food choice. Others argue that would be their choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The issue of whether the government should control a human’s meal by-laws has been provoking a lot of debates. Some people say that every individual has a
right
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 to choose what they want to eat and know what is better for themself, while others think that they have to follow the regulations in order to be supplied with all nutrients necessary. Personally, I consider myself as an advocate with the former idea while the latter one is
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 useful in some circumstances. Without a shadow of a doubt, citizens have their own life and they can make a decision about what they extremely want for their body and their health so that they have the
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 to freely choose their favourite
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. Because eating is a process for relaxing and coming into pleasure
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 of the pressure.
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, the people who can make a nutrient choice for themself like chocolate or milk tea feel happier than others who have to force it on the menu.
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, it is irrefutable that people have
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right
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 in choosing their
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.
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, principles still have
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 merits in maintaining people’s health. Because a lot of citizens are too easy on eating and they consume a myriad of fast
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such
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 as hamburgers, pizza or
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fried chicken
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fried-chicken
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 so they can easily come down with some diseases
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 as obesity and diabetes.
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 it is necessary to give rules to keep control of people’s nutrition and foodstuff choice and guard their health. In conclusion, eating is a hobby and everybody should have the
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 to choose their favourite
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 and the governments do not need to establish
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laws to control it.
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