Some people belive that nowadays we have too many choices.

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world some people thought that we have more freedom to choose between different choices easier than
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past. In fact, in my point of view, it is true. Improvements in all subjects can lead to
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choices
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in our life.
To begin
with,
as a result
of progress in the international community we have more ways to pass in our life.
In other words
, by the improvements in our
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we have more chance to make our own decision.
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food science we have in our generation, we can pick up our
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life style
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for healthy or unhealthy types of foods to use. Or another example is about my country,
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, in
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decades parents made
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for their
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marriage ,
however
, over time the nature of the families changed and the process of getting married depends on the youngers
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.
On the other hand
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there are lots of positions that we can see no many choices are available.
Firstly
,
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school process is not a
choice
but a force to make children ready for
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steps of
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studying
and improving skills and it is a beneficial force for them
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that age because they can not decide.
Although
in some undeveloped countries no freedom can be seen in different subjects to make a
choice
. People who live in these countries are suffering from war or after war effects or most of the time hunger, so they
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have any other
choice
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alive. In conclusion, it is true that we have more
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to choose in
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world but still not enough.it should be spread much more in other parts despite in some occasions that we know force is a better
choice
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