Some people belive that nowadays we have too many choices.

Undeniabely

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, in

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today's

todays

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world some people thought that we have more freedom to choose between different choices easier than

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past. In fact, in my point of view, it is true. Improvements in all subjects can lead to

make

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variety

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choices

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in our life.

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with,

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of progress in the international community we have more ways to pass in our life.

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, by the improvements in our

society

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we have more chance to make our own decision.

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, with the

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food science we have in our generation, we can pick up our

favorite

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lifestyle

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life style

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for healthy or unhealthy types of foods to use. Or another example is about my country,

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last

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decades parents made

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decision

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for their

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children's

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marriage ,

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, over time the nature of the families changed and the process of getting married depends on the youngers

choice

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there are lots of positions that we can see no many choices are available.

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primary

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school process is not a

choice

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but a force to make children ready for

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steps of

studing

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studying

and improving skills and it is a beneficial force for them

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that age because they can not decide.

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in some undeveloped countries no freedom can be seen in different subjects to make a

choice

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. People who live in these countries are suffering from war or after war effects or most of the time hunger, so they

dont

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don't

have any other

choice

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except

being

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alive. In conclusion, it is true that we have more

chance

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to choose in

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today's

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world but still not enough.it should be spread much more in other parts despite in some occasions that we know force is a better

choice

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Feb 14, 2022

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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295 words

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