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Some people prefer full-time jobs because they offer stability. Other people prefer casual jobs because of the freedom they offer. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #jobs #offer #stability #freedom
Nowadays, due to
freedom
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internet
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the internet
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 has provided for us it is possible to choose a preferable
approch
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approach
 for working. While some people opt for full-time jobs mostly because of
job
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 security it provides, others enjoy
flexibility
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the flexibility
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 that a casual
job
 can bring. I believe that
,
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chosing
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choosing
 a type of work is a matter of personal
prefrences
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preferences
preference
. On
one
 hand, companies provide many facilities for their full-time employees. Housing facilities and healthcare insurance would be the main reasons for
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full time
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job
.
Moreover
, fixed monthly salary, retirement pensions and perks like paid leaves or sick leaves are not approachable in
casual
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the casual
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job
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jobs
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.
On the other hand
,
casual
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a casual
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job
 provides flexibility in many aspects. Success and failure in
this
 approach totally
depends
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 on
ones
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 own effort. It is not needed to wait for appraisals and promotions along with earning greater. A greater amount of revenue can be gained by hard try.
Also
becuase
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because
 probably communication with
wide
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a wide
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 range of people is required for
casual
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a casual
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job
,
one
 can meet people from all walks of life. To conclude, I believe that due to
diffrent
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different
life-styles
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lifestyles
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, jobbers can choose their
carrer
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career
 path. While maybe in few past years
variaty
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variety
 of choices were not available, today
one
 can choose his/her desired approach just due to its cons and pros and there is
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one
 best choice.
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