sudies show that many criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they could get a good job once they are released. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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a criminal is highly according to the education background has risen. Some
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believe that
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who commit crimes because their character is bad, but
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think that all communities should get
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discipline that could demolish the bad motivation from a human. I believe that everyone deserves positive lessons to learn how to live with healthy mental status. After understanding criminals' stories and complex motivations, most of their solutions must tightly originate from their educational background and their living environment.
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without fully educated find it is hard to survive and feel society is treating them unfairly.
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, they are eager to find a way to solve the problem by hunting
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' property.
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, undeveloped countries have higher crime rates compared to developed counties.
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undeveloped countries rarely have abundant education resources to learn how to make money.
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, to survive, they have to rob or steal to get a penny. The other point is criminals have the right to learn how to perform good manner with secondary education. A person becomes a lawbreaker is not fully their own fault but
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, once they made a crime, the public must give them a chance to give the person a
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provides robbers opportunities to learn how to work in a factory. Twisted mind person can learn how to cooperate with
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when they are having group living with mental teacher's assistance. In my opinion, it is undeniable that criminals are formed due to civilization.
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chance for them to restart a new life as a basic human right.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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