Some people say that sports play an important role in society. Others, however, think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate over the importance of
sports
activities. While some claim that it is crucial for
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society to flourish, the opposite makes a statement that it is merely a free time activity. While the latter is valid to some extent, I consider myself
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a proponent of the former. Without a shadow of a doubt, there is a wealth of
reason
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why
people
consider sport as a leisure activity.
One
of them is because they take up
sports
with a view to having a tranquil mind after a
hard working
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day or study.
For instance
, in VietNam the students who are snowed under a wealth of homework and assignments are having a tendency to take up various
sports
such
as
basketball
, soccer to relax despite having no advantage in their study journey.
Therefore
, some
people
consider taking up
sport
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is
wastes
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of time and it
no
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more than an entertaining method.
On the other hand
,
sports
play a paramount significant role in our daily life, especially the residents. In daily life, taking up
sports
activity is
one
of the most effective therapy for
people
to enhance their health and their physical condition.
For instance
, by playing
basketball
, a sport that you have to use your whole body and mind to play through till the end of the game, they can improve their respiratory system and
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their lung capacity as well as avoid
heart
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stroke. Not only do playing
sports
improve our health, if you have talent in it you can turn it into a job and earn a living cost with it.
For example
, Stephen Curry is
one
of the most famous
basketball
players in the world and
also
one
of the richest
basketball
players with the money from advertising for a
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sports
agency. In conclusion,
sports
with a wealth of benefits play an indispensable part in
people
life.
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